Re: [gnso-irtpc] For review - Draft Initial Report

[Angie Graves <angie12345@xxxxxxxxx>]

Hi Marika,

Reviewing the document, I found some apparent typos and have listed them
below, along with suggestions for replacement text.

, if denial reason #9 would be applied

suggest changing to: were applied

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which was update on a regular basis

suggest changing to: which was updated on a regular basis

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Following review of the IRTP Part C Final Issue Report and the use cases,
the WG concluded that currently that currently there does not exist a
policy in relation to “change of control” or “change of registrant”, even
though such a process is implied, for example in the Uniform Dispute
Resolution Policy .

suggested changes:

* remove the second “currently there”

* punctuation for “change of registrant,” -- comma goes inside the
quotation marks

* add a comma after “for example”

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the WG did take into account hat

suggest changing to: the WG did take into account that

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it should neither prevent innovation and differentiation amongst registrars.

Comment:  The wording is not clear to me.

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Committees, and; comments

suggest changing to: Committees; and comments

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community submissions

suggest changing to: community submission

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There where

suggest changing to: Where

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ccTLD level easier

suggest changing to:  ccTLD level is easier

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various jurisdictions

suggest changing to:  multiple jurisdictions

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new holder I s an individual

suggest changing to:  new holder is an individual

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process, before

suggest changing to:  process; before,

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Thank you,


Angie



On Thu, Mar 29, 2012 at 6:49 AM, Marika Konings <marika.konings@xxxxxxxxx>wrote:

> Dear All,
>
> You'll find attached and posted on the wiki (
> https://community.icann.org/display/gnsoirtppdpwg/Next+Meeting) a first
> draft of the proposed Initial Report. Highlighted in yellow are those areas
> that need further completion / input from the WG (some of those will
> require the sub-teams to complete their tasks first). Please feel free to
> share any comments / edits you may have with the mailing list.
>
> With best regards,
>
> Marika
>