RE: [gnso-pednr-dt] REMINDER: For Final Review by Monday 6 June - PEDNR Final Report

[Alan Greenberg <alan.greenberg@xxxxxxxxx>]

Although he did not say it, the comments of re-jigging the formatting 
seem to apply to section 7.4 on comments to the proposed final report.
I have no problem with what Michael is suggesting, but  I tend to 
feel that we should keep changes at a minimum at this time. I think 
that the bulk of his problem might be addressed by simply inserting 
the Charter questions in the table preceding each group of Recs that 
address them. Repeating the Recs twice as Michael suggests seems overkill.
I will also note that if we go ahead as discussed an renumber the 
Recs for the final report, we really need to annotate the Recs in 
section 7.4 to reflect the new number as well as the old.
Alan

At 06/06/2011 08:52 AM, Michael Young wrote:
> Hi Marika,
>
> First of all, thanks so much for all the hard work, I don't see how 
> we could have gotten this done without your extensive efforts.
> I have some notes on the way the document is laid out.  It's is a 
> bit of a monster with so many data points and the sheer volume of 
> discussion output from a long running working group.
> While  I like the comments sorted out against the charter questions, 
> the way they are numbered 1-57 with the questions interposed 
> (without numerical cross-reference) is confusing.
> Also I would like to see the charter questions clearly related to 
> both the comments and the recommendations.  Particularly since some 
> of the comments really refer back to details on the recommendations.
> I suggest the following structure/layout to make this easy to digest 
> for non working group members.
> Each Charter Question gets a sub-section:
> Charter Questions One:
>
> 1.       CHARTER QUESTION HERE:
>
> Recommendations go in as sub-points
>
>                                             I. 
> Recommendation "abc"
>                                           II.            Recommendation "xyz"
>
> Comments in reference to Charter Question and/or recommendation go 
> in as further sub-points to Recommendations:
>                                             I. 
> Recommendation "abc"
> a)      First comment
>
>                                           II.            Recommendation "xyz"
>
> b)      Second comment
> c)       Third etc
>
> Comments directly related to the Charter Question are placed after 
> the recommendations in a sub-section marked General comments.
> Lastly you could place at the end of each Charter Question Section 
> and minority viewpoints or ideas as related directly to the charter 
> question or the comments submitted.
> This places the comments in context of the related recommendations 
> and the related Charter Question.  It reduces the chance of 
> misunderstanding the intent of a comment or the issue it is trying 
> to either raise or the support it is trying to offer.
> I hope you find these comments useful.
>
>
>
> Best Regards,
>
> Michael Young
> M:+1-647-289-1220
>
> From: owner-gnso-pednr-dt@xxxxxxxxx 
> [mailto:owner-gnso-pednr-dt@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Marika Konings
> Sent: June-06-11 4:02 AM
> To: Marika Konings; gnso-pednr-dt@xxxxxxxxx
> Subject: [gnso-pednr-dt] REMINDER: For Final Review by Monday 6 June 
> - PEDNR Final Report
> REMINDER
>
> From: Marika Konings 
> <<mailto:marika.konings@xxxxxxxxx>marika.konings@xxxxxxxxx>
> Date: Wed, 1 Jun 2011 00:59:44 -0700
> To: "<mailto:gnso-pednr-dt@xxxxxxxxx>gnso-pednr-dt@xxxxxxxxx" 
> <<mailto:gnso-pednr-dt@xxxxxxxxx>gnso-pednr-dt@xxxxxxxxx>
> Subject: [gnso-pednr-dt] For Final Review by Monday 6 June - PEDNR 
> Final Report
> Dear All,
>
> Please find posted on the wiki 
> (<https://community.icann.org/display/gnsopednr/Next+Meeting>https://community.icann.org/display/gnsopednr/Next+Meeting) 
> for final review the latest version of the PEDNR Final Report. This 
> version incorporates the changes discussed on yesterday's meeting, 
> in addition to some other updates to reflect the status of the 
> report and minor edits. Note that the recommendations in the 
> executive summary still need to be updated to reflect the final 
> language as in section 8. Also, there was agreement to reorganize 
> the recommendations to group related ones together. This will also 
> happen following finalization of the language of the recommendations.
> Note that the report currently states that 'All the recommendations 
> listed below have full consensus support from the Working Group'. If 
> you disagree with this assessment, please share your views with the 
> mailing list and indicate with which recommendations you disagree 
> and would like to submit a minority viewpoint.
> Please send your comments, edits and/or suggestions to the mailing 
> list at the latest by Monday 6 June, close of business (wherever you 
> are). The objective is to review and discuss any remaining issues 
> during next week's meeting on Tuesday 7 June, following which the 
> report will be finalized for submission to the GNSO Council.
> With best regards,
>
> Marika