RE: [soac-newgtldapsup-wg] writing exercise.
Dear all, Sorry for the long silence (in Vilnius). I would like to thank Avri for all her input despite her very busy time here in Vilnius. I read very carefully the cover letter and the excerpt final report she sent. Here are my comments: As for the cover letter, I find it well, but did some minor modifications (I did it since days and I forgot what I changed, but think it was related to the syntax or other form aspects) See attached. For the excerpt final report, I also did some modifications on it (attached), and for the very important issues, here are the remarks: • Line 31: remove “Financial” • Line 43-44 becomes 41-42 and 41-42 become 43-44 – This is to put the bullet point about lowering the registry fixed fees under the cost reduction recommendations, and let the refund from the auction under the sub-paragraph “Further”. • Line 60: The funds should be distributed with special consideration for the applications coming from the developing countries as explicitly mentioned in the resolution 20. Indeed, if we would specify a certain priority, we should do it to the applicants from developing countries, not to any other community. • Line 67-69: is it fare that one single applicant get support from several parties while others couldn’t apply because of their need? • Line 68: is it in our mission to recommend aids for all applicants, out of the ones meeting the criteria of eligibility? • Line 109-110: Entrepreneurs coming from and serving a developing market ……. • Line 125-126: On ongoing cost, support should …… ----------------------------------------------------------------------------- Tijani BEN JEMAA Directeur exécutif Fédération Méditerranéenne des Associations d'Internet Phone : + 216 70 825 231 Mobile : + 216 98 330 114 Fax : + 216 70 825 231 ----------------------------------------------------------------------------- Attachment:
Excerpt Final Report JAS WG v3.doc Attachment:
Cover letter-v2.doc |