Re: [gnso-dow123] FOR REVIEW: Draft PreliminaryTaskForceReport on the Purpose of Whois]

["Anthony Harris" <harris@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Looks ok to me

Tony Harris
ISPCP Constituency

----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Maria Farrell" <maria.farrell@xxxxxxxxx>
To: "'Milton Mueller'" <Mueller@xxxxxxx>; <ross@xxxxxxxxxx>
Cc: <gnso-dow123@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>; <gnso.secretariat@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
Sent: Tuesday, January 10, 2006 12:46 PM
Subject: RE: [gnso-dow123] FOR REVIEW: Draft PreliminaryTaskForceReport on 
the Purpose of Whois]


> Dear all,
>
> Having followed the discussion on-list about revisions to this draft
> preliminary task force report, I present you with a revised draft.  As 
> there
> was not a consensus on the list about all the changes, I've tried to
> incorporate the changes that were the least contentious.  The attached 
> draft
> does the following:
>
> - includes the complete NCUC statement, i.e. on purpose of Whois as well 
> as
> that on purpose of Whois contacts.
>
> - incorporates Steve Metalitz' suggestion re. 2nd para of section 2 "and
> whether its purpose relates to the domain name registration only, or more
> broadly to how the domain name is used."  (I don't think this is a
> substantive change, but it is a tidier way to express it and does seem to 
> be
> more accurate in terms of the task force's discussions.)
>
> -  in the third para under formulation 2 I've simply put "consistent with
> ICANN's Mission and Core Values".  Removing the adjective altogether makes
> this sentence more of a factual statement on the beliefs of the
> formulation's endorsers.
>
> - created consistent sub-headings in all the constituency statements for
> 'purpose of Whois' and 'purpose of Whois contacts', to make the report
> easier to read.
>
> - included in a new Section 4 the relevant excerpt of the GNSO Public
> Comment Forum from Vancouver.  (The full summary of the public forum is
> still under review and will be posted on the website shortly.)
>
> - included 2 new sentences in section 1 on background and introduction
> giving some guidance on public comments: "Public comments are invited
> particularly on the two formulations of the purpose of Whois in section 2.
> Commenters are encouraged to explain the use cases of the formulations 
> where
> appropriate, e.g. by giving practical examples and explaining how the
> differences between the two definitions may affect those practical
> examples." This summarises Bruce Tonkin's request at the public forum
> regarding public comments on the formulations.
>
> - included 1 new sentence on in section 1 regarding the constituency
> statements; "They provide important background information that 
> supplements
> the two formulations."
>
> I hope these revisions improve the report.  Our plan is to have it posted 
> on
> the ICANN website for public comments by the end of this week.  So, if at
> all possible, I would appreciate your comments and any further revisions 
> by
> the end of Wednesday (tomorrow).
>
> All the best, Maria
>
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: owner-gnso-dow123@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-dow123@xxxxxxxxx] On
> Behalf Of Milton Mueller
> Sent: Monday, January 09, 2006 9:46 PM
> To: ross@xxxxxxxxxx
> Cc: gnso-dow123@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx; gnso.secretariat@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
> Subject: Re: [gnso-dow123] FOR REVIEW: Draft PreliminaryTaskForceReport on
> the Purpose of Whois]
>
> Yes, that was my concern, too. It may be better to leave as is. As I said, 
> I
> will go whichever way takes less time.
>
> > > > Ross Rader <ross@xxxxxxxxxx> 1/9/2006 9:59 AM >>>
> My preference  would simply be to close this off without much further in 
> the
> way of drastic edits. I personally don't want to have to re-review my
> constituencies submission to make sure that it still makes sense 
> post-edit.