RE: [gnso-ff-pdp-may08] PLEASE REVIEW - Updated version of fast flux initial report posted
Here is the reline version, showing tracked changes. -----Original Message----- From: Mike Rodenbaugh [mailto:icann@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx] Sent: Friday, December 19, 2008 8:06 AM To: 'Fast Flux Workgroup' Subject: RE: [gnso-ff-pdp-may08] PLEASE REVIEW - Updated version of fast flux initial report posted Here is my suggested text for Section 6, which leaves it largely intact but takes out some of the language I found objectionable. Thanks, Mike -----Original Message----- From: owner-gnso-ff-pdp-may08@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-ff-pdp-may08@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Dave Piscitello Sent: Thursday, December 11, 2008 10:31 AM To: Marika Konings; Fast Flux Workgroup Subject: Re: [gnso-ff-pdp-may08] PLEASE REVIEW - Updated version of fast flux initial report posted This reminds me of actions taken at last call, so a note to all... Martin and I are editing the annex with the data graphs and hope to have something shortly for list review. On 12/8/08 9:37 AM Dec 8, 2008, "Marika Konings" <marika.konings@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Dear All, > > As discussed on our call last Friday, I have posted on the Wiki > (https://st.icann.org/pdp-wg-ff/index.cgi?fast_flux_pdp_wg) a OEclean¹ version > of the draft Fast Flux Initial Report which incorporates all the changes and > edits of the previous version, as well as those discussed on Friday, to > facilitate the review of the overall document. For your convenience, I have > posted both the PDF as well as the Word version. The previous version of the > draft Initial Report (dated 3 December) is still posted on the Wiki for those > of you that want to see which changes were incorporated in the OEclean¹ > version. > > Working Group members are strongly encouraged to review the whole document, > with the objective to finalise it on our next conference call on Friday 19 > December (please note that there will be no call on Friday 12 December). > Please send any edits that are intended to clarify and/or improve readability > directly to me. Any other proposed changes, that go beyond the scope of simple > edits, should be sent to the mailing list for review and discussion. I will > produce an updated version that includes in track changes all edits and > proposed changes prior to the next call. Note that this version already > includes two proposed changes/additions in track changes that were posted on > the mailing list in the last few days. > > With best regards, > > Marika Attachment:
FF-WG Section 6 mxr redraft (redline).doc
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