[gnso-irtpc] i've had a go at revising the report, based on the "use case" discussion
hi all, i decided this might be a good time to switch from "pictures" back to "words" to see how the stuff we've learned in the last several weeks might play out in our final report. so, while i still plan to redo the pictures, i thought i'd run through and drive new language into the report to see what i learned. i've attached the result. my changes start on page 21 and end on page 25, but i'm shipping the whole report in hopes that it will make editing easier. i don't think we've really changed things a whole lot, but you be the judge. i debated whether we should stick the use-case drawings into the Word document or not -- i'd be happy to bash those in if you think it would be helpful. mikey Attachment:
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