Re: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 03 Oct

[Julie Hedlund <julie.hedlund@xxxxxxxxx>]

Hi Olga,

I will plan to incorporate all of the agreed-upon changes into a final document 
on Friday for submission on Monday.

Thanks,
Julie


On 10/12/10 12:22 PM, "Olga Cavalli" <olgacavalli@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:

Hi,
thanks Julie for polishing my comments and thanks Chuck and Claudio for your 
imput into the document.
I am ok with both proposed changes.
Chuck in relation with your comment in your last email, do you want to leave 
the paragraph 2.1.1 as it was?
I am not sure if I understand which is the language you support. Could you 
clarify?
Other comments are welcome.
I propose that we set up next Friday as a limit for recieveing additional 
comments or for the revision of the present version.
I will take silence as a yes if nobody else sends them. New version could be 
sent to the OSC by next Monday.
Best regards
Olga

2010/10/11 Gomes, Chuck <cgomes@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
 I am okay with Claudio’s additional edits but we might want to discuss the 
following further:

•         The last paragraph of 2.1.1 now reads: “An initial objective of the 
OTF should be to conduct a survey of existing GNSO outreach activities by the 
stakeholder groups, constituencies, and ICANN, including the Fellowship 
program. The OTF could then analyze the effectiveness and balance of existing 
efforts and resources to develop recommendations for improved future Outreach. 
Where possible, ICANN Outreach can take place in conjunction with other related 
ICANN Programs, such as Compliance or those related to the new introduction of 
new top-level domain names.”  It previously was more specific as can be seen by 
looking at the redline version.  I personally think the change is okay.


Chuck


From: Claudio Di Gangi [mailto:cdigangi@xxxxxxxx]
Sent: Sunday, October 10, 2010 8:51 PM
To: Gomes, Chuck; Olga Cavalli; OSC-CSG Work Team

Subject: RE: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 
03 Oct

Team,

I included some further red-line edits in the attached, building from the 
changes Chuck suggests below, which I support.

claudio


From: owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx] On 
Behalf Of Gomes, Chuck
Sent: Friday, October 08, 2010 8:44 PM
To: Olga Cavalli; OSC-CSG Work Team
Subject: RE: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 
03 Oct

I made the following edits in the attached file and noted items that I couldn’t 
figure out how to fix:

2.1 Recommendations for a Global Outreach Strategy
•         I inserted “to” that was inadvertently deleted in the first sentence 
of the last paragraph that starts on page 3 and in the same sentence changed 
“large companies” to “companies”.


2.1.1 Purpose, Mission, Principles, and Initiate Objective of the Outreach Task 
Force
•         I changed “Intitiate” to “Initial” in the above title.

•         The last paragraph starting on page 4 is very confusing: “The OSC CSG 
Work Team recommends that the mission of the OTF should include coordinating 
outreach with relevant ICANN organizations and could incorporate 
recommendations from the OSC CSG Work Team’s report Recommended Common 
Operating Principles and Participation Guidelines for GNSO Stakeholder Groups 
and Constituencies; and Recommendations on a GNSO Database of Community Members 
<http://gnso.icann.org/drafts/draft-csg-recommendations-task-27may10-en.pdf>  
when establishing other specifics regarding the structure of the OTF, voting 
thresholds, publicity, events, and other activities.”  Is the semi-colon a 
typo; should it be deleted?  I think this whole paragraph needs fixing.

•         I made what I think are minor edits to item 1 near the top of page 5: 
“Outreach to potential participants in the Commercial Stakeholder Group is 
different from outreach to potential participants in the Non-Commercial 
Stakeholder Group”


2.1.2 Membership of the Outreach Task Force
•         I deleted the following in the first paragraph: “Staff support could 
be minimal.”  I don’t think we know if this will be true or not.

•         Also in the first paragraph I deleted the size of the MAG (“50”) 
because I don’t think we want to imply that the OTF should be that big.

•         In the last paragraph I made the change shown here: “The Charter 
should also set goals for the completion of the membership selection process, 
establishment of a meeting schedule, and participation guidelines.”


2.1.3 Identifying Potential Participants and Target Populations
•         I changed the 3rd paragraph to the following: “The telecommunications 
youth forums at the International Telecommunications Union (ITU) are an example 
of successful outreach programs that could be used to inform and support the 
OTF’s efforts.  See: 
http://www.itu.int/ITU-D/youth/itu__telecom_youth_forums.html 
<http://www.itu.int/ITU-D/youth/itu__telecom_youth_forums.html> .”


Chuck






From: owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx] On 
Behalf Of Olga Cavalli
Sent: Thursday, October 07, 2010 12:35 PM
To: OSC-CSG Work Team
Subject: Fwd: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach 
Recommendations 03 Oct

Dear working team members,
please remember to review the attached document and make comments or suggested 
changes to this version that was edited by me and Julie.
If we hear no comments we may submit it to the osc by next Monday.
Comments are welcome, best regards and thanks.
Olga

---------- Forwarded message ----------
From: Julie Hedlund <julie.hedlund@xxxxxxxxx>
Date: 2010/10/4
Subject: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 03 
Oct
To: gnso-osc-csg <gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx>

Dear Olga and Work Team members,

Attached is the revised Global Outreach Recommendations document based on our 
discussion at the Work Team meeting last Friday in response to comments 
received by the OSC and responses from Work Team members.  These include edits 
from Olga and some additions that I made based on our discussion.  Please 
review this document and provide your suggested changes as tracked changes in 
the document or as comments to this list.  Thank you for your assistance.

Best regards,

Julie