Re: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 03 Oct

[Olga Cavalli <olgacavalli@xxxxxxxxx>]

Thank you very much Julie.
Other comments are welcome as soon as possible.
Best regards
Olga

2010/10/12 Julie Hedlund <julie.hedlund@xxxxxxxxx>

>  Hi Olga,
>
> I will plan to incorporate all of the agreed-upon changes into a final
> document on Friday for submission on Monday.
>
> Thanks,
> Julie
>
>
>
> On 10/12/10 12:22 PM, "Olga Cavalli" <olgacavalli@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
>
> Hi,
> thanks Julie for polishing my comments and thanks Chuck and Claudio for
> your imput into the document.
> I am ok with both proposed changes.
> Chuck in relation with your comment in your last email, do you want to
> leave the paragraph 2.1.1 as it was?
> I am not sure if I understand which is the language you support. Could you
> clarify?
> Other comments are welcome.
> I propose that we set up next Friday as a limit for recieveing additional
> comments or for the revision of the present version.
> I will take silence as a yes if nobody else sends them. New version could
> be sent to the OSC by next Monday.
> Best regards
> Olga
>
> 2010/10/11 Gomes, Chuck <cgomes@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
>
>  I am okay with Claudio’s additional edits but we might want to discuss the
> following further:
>
> ·         The last paragraph of 2.1.1 now reads: “An initial objective of
> the OTF should be to conduct a survey of existing GNSO outreach activities
> by the stakeholder groups, constituencies, and ICANN, including the
> Fellowship program. The OTF could then analyze the effectiveness and balance
> of existing efforts and resources to develop recommendations for improved
> future Outreach. Where possible, ICANN Outreach can take place in
> conjunction with other related ICANN Programs, such as Compliance or those
> related to the new introduction of new top-level domain names.”  It
> previously was more specific as can be seen by looking at the redline
> version.  I personally think the change is okay.
>
>
> Chuck
>
>
> *From:* Claudio Di Gangi [mailto:cdigangi@xxxxxxxx <cdigangi@xxxxxxxx>]
> *Sent:* Sunday, October 10, 2010 8:51 PM
> *To:* Gomes, Chuck; Olga Cavalli; OSC-CSG Work Team
>
> *Subject:* RE: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach
> Recommendations 03 Oct
>
> Team,
>
> I included some further red-line edits in the attached, building from the
> changes Chuck suggests below, which I support.
>
> claudio
>
>
> *From:* owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx 
> [mailto:owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx<owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx>]
> *On Behalf Of *Gomes, Chuck
> *Sent:* Friday, October 08, 2010 8:44 PM
> *To:* Olga Cavalli; OSC-CSG Work Team
> *Subject:* RE: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach
> Recommendations 03 Oct
>
> I made the following edits in the attached file and noted items that I
> couldn’t figure out how to fix:
>
> *2.1 Recommendations for a Global Outreach Strategy
> *·         I inserted “to” that was inadvertently deleted in the first
> sentence of the last paragraph that starts on page 3 and in the same
> sentence changed “large companies” to “companies”.
>
> *
> **2.1.1 Purpose, Mission, Principles, and Initiate Objective of the
> Outreach Task Force
> *·         I changed “Intitiate” to “Initial” in the above title.
>
> ·         The last paragraph starting on page 4 is very confusing: “The
> OSC CSG Work Team recommends that the mission of the OTF should include
> coordinating outreach with relevant ICANN organizations and could
> incorporate recommendations from the OSC CSG Work Team’s report Recommended
> Common Operating Principles and Participation Guidelines for GNSO
> Stakeholder Groups and Constituencies; and Recommendations on a GNSO
> Database of Community Members <
> http://gnso.icann.org/drafts/draft-csg-recommendations-task-27may10-en.pdf>
>  when establishing other specifics regarding the structure of the OTF,
> voting thresholds, publicity, events, and other activities.”  Is the
> semi-colon a typo; should it be deleted?  I think this whole paragraph needs
> fixing.
>
> ·         I made what I think are minor edits to item 1 near the top of
> page 5: “Outreach to potential participants in the Commercial Stakeholder
> Group is different from outreach to potential participants in the
> Non-Commercial Stakeholder Group”
>
>
> *2.1.2 Membership of the Outreach Task Force
> *·         I deleted the following in the first paragraph: “Staff support
> could be minimal.”  I don’t think we know if this will be true or not.
>
> ·         Also in the first paragraph I deleted the size of the MAG (“50”)
> because I don’t think we want to imply that the OTF should be that big.
>
> ·         In the last paragraph I made the change shown here: “The Charter
> should also set goals for the completion of the membership selection
> process, establishment of a meeting schedule, and participation guidelines.”
>
>
> *2.1.3 Identifying Potential Participants and Target Populations
> *
> ·         I changed the 3rd paragraph to the following: “The
> telecommunications youth forums at the International Telecommunications
> Union (ITU) are an example of successful outreach programs that could be
> used to inform and support the OTF’s efforts.  See:
> http://www.itu.int/ITU-D/youth/itu__telecom_youth_forums.html <
> http://www.itu.int/ITU-D/youth/itu__telecom_youth_forums.html> .”
>
>
> Chuck
>
>
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>
>
>
> *From:* owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx 
> [mailto:owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx<owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx>]
> *On Behalf Of *Olga Cavalli
> *Sent:* Thursday, October 07, 2010 12:35 PM
> *To:* OSC-CSG Work Team
> *Subject:* Fwd: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach
> Recommendations 03 Oct
>
> Dear working team members,
> please remember to review the attached document and make comments or
> suggested changes to this version that was edited by me and Julie.
> If we hear no comments we may submit it to the osc by next Monday.
> Comments are welcome, best regards and thanks.
> Olga
>
> ---------- Forwarded message ----------
> From: *Julie Hedlund* <julie.hedlund@xxxxxxxxx>
> Date: 2010/10/4
> Subject: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations
> 03 Oct
> To: gnso-osc-csg <gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx>
>
> Dear Olga and Work Team members,
>
> Attached is the revised Global Outreach Recommendations document based on
> our discussion at the Work Team meeting last Friday in response to comments
> received by the OSC and responses from Work Team members.  These include
> edits from Olga and some additions that I made based on our discussion.
>  Please review this document and provide your suggested changes as tracked
> changes in the document or as comments to this list.  Thank you for your
> assistance.
>
> Best regards,
>
> Julie
>
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