RE: [soac-newgtldapsup-wg] current Draft Final report, v 2.7 (Aug 24) - to continue review
Dear Tijani, Thank you very much for the feedback. I have made the changes as indicated by your bullets 1, 2, 3, 4 and 7. I did not change the bullets 5 and 6 because I would like to have an ok from the chairs since I have a different recollection of what was agreed. Attached is the corrected document that will be uploaded in adobe. Kind regards, Karla From: Tijani BEN JEMAA [mailto:tijani.benjemaa@xxxxxxxx] Sent: Friday, August 27, 2010 2:18 AM To: Karla Valente; soac-newgtldapsup-wg@xxxxxxxxx Subject: RE: [soac-newgtldapsup-wg] current Draft Final report, v 2.7 (Aug 24) - to continue review Karla, Please find hereafter my comments: * "Key to making a support ..." (line 171) is not a bullet point. It's simply the beginning of the paragraph. * "The main criteria..." (line 174) should be at the beginning of the line (need a return after "....controversial to support") * The need is single, so it's a criterion and not a criteria: Replace "the main criteria" by "the main criterion", and "...the need criteria is met" by "the need criterion is met" * We will also need a return after "...is met" (line 175) * When we say: based of these criteria (line 175-176), which criteria we mean? We only mentioned the need as criterion and a consideration of finding a limited identifiable and not controversial set of applicants, which is not in my understanding a criterion. * (Line 176) "...the WG recommends to give support to the following groups (with no preference order)" * "Community based applications..." (line 177) is a bullet point (not numbers or a,b,c,...) ------------------------------------------------------------------ Tijani BEN JEMAA Directeur exécutif Fédération Méditerranéenne des Associations d'Internet Phone : + 216 70 825 231 Mobile : + 216 98 330 114 Fax : + 216 70 825 231 ------------------------------------------------------------------ ________________________________ De : owner-soac-newgtldapsup-wg@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-soac-newgtldapsup-wg@xxxxxxxxx] De la part de Karla Valente Envoyé : vendredi 27 août 2010 01:29 À : soac-newgtldapsup-wg@xxxxxxxxx Objet : [soac-newgtldapsup-wg] current Draft Final report, v 2.7 (Aug 24) - to continue review Dear all, Please note the following updates were done on the Wiki (https://st.icann.org/so-ac-new-gtld-wg/index.cgi?so_ac_new_gtld_applicant_support_working_group) and will be available on Adobe: 1. Uploaded the most recent Draft Final Report, which is version 2.7, last update done based on August 24 Conference call. You will find two documents, one redlined and another clean version to be easier to read. They are both attached on this e-mail (word and pdf) for your convenience. NOTE: We stopped on line 186 (see green highlight) If I missed or misinterpreted any update, please let me know! Thank you, Karla Attachment:
Draft Final Report JAS WG v2.7.Aug24 Clean.pdf
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