Re: [ssac-gnso-irdwg] FOR REVIEW/DISCUSSION: Revised Draft IRD-WG Presentation for Cartagena

[Julie Hedlund <julie.hedlund@xxxxxxxxx>]

Thanks Jim!

Julie


On 11/22/10 8:52 AM, "Jim Galvin" <jgalvin@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:

> A few minor editorial comments:
> 
> 
> Slide 9 should say "WHOIS protocol clients" not "WHOIS service clients".
> 
> Since we say "US-ASCII" on slide 11 we should say "US-ASCII" on slides
> 7 and 17 too.  If you prefer something other than US-ASCII then use
> that on all three slides.  I prefer US-ASCII.
> 
> Slide 12 should say "Domain Registration Data" instead of the various
> other phrases it uses.  Slides 13, 14, and 15 should be adjusted
> accordingly to be consistent with whatever is done on slide 12.
> 
> Slide 16: "WHOIS clients" --> "WHOIS protocol clients"; "WHOIS
> responses" --> "domain registration data"
> 
> On slide 18 the first question in question 2 needs a question mark.
> 
> 
> Thanks,
> 
> Jim
> 
> 
> 
> On Nov 19, 2010, at 4:12 PM, Julie Hedlund wrote:
> 
>> Dear IRD-WG members,
>> 
>> Here is the revised draft presentation for Cartagena for your
>> review, which attempts to address suggested changes from from Owen,
>> Jim, and Steve.  We will discuss this document on our call on
>> Monday, 22 November at 1600 UTC (0800 PST/1100 EST).  Please let us
>> know if you have any questions.
>> 
>> Thank you very much for your assistance.
>> 
>> Best regards,
>> 
>> Julie
>>> 
>>> 
>> <Internationalized Registration Data Interim Report Presentation
>> Draft 19 Nov 2010.ppt>
>