Re: [gnso-consumercci-dt] Latest Version of Advice Letter & Supplement

[Evan Leibovitch <evan@xxxxxxxxx>]

Thanks, Steve.

One small request.
I've noticed a typo in my comment (which at the time I hadn't expected
would make it into the report).

On the second paragraph of page 22 could you please change "asset" to
"assert"?

Thanks!



On 16 August 2012 14:36, Steve DelBianco <sdelbianco@xxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:

>   Thanks, Berry.
>
>  In the attached markup of the Advice Letter:
>
> On page 4 we should note Evan's reply comment.  I did it this way:
>  The dissenting position of two WG members are included in Appendix C, along
> with a response to that dissent from another WG member.
>
>  On page 8 I fixed one grammar error "Scope … is "
>
>  I repeated the table heading row on several pages
>
>
>  The link to WG attendance Log requires the reader to have Confluence
> login credentials.   Could you save the spreadsheet as a PDF and place it
> somewhere that does not require the reader to login?
>
>
>  In the attached Next Steps note to GNSO:
>
> I revised footnote 1 on the timeline to read:
> ICANN Board instructs ICANN to start collecting available baseline metrics
> of existing gTLDs and new gTLDs once delegated, until final metrics
> framework requirement is completed by the Review Team
>
>
>  I revised footnote 6 to read:
>
> 3 Year delegation mark for target comparison, as requested in the Dec-2010
> ICANN Board resolution.
>
>   From: Berry Cobb <mail@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
> Date: Tuesday, August 14, 2012 8:06 PM
> To: "gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx" <gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx>
> Subject: [gnso-consumercci-dt] Latest Version of Advice Letter &
> Supplement
>
>   Team,****
>
> ** **
>
> Here are the latest drafts of the Advice Letter and supplement Action Plan
> for the GNSO Council.  As mentioned on the call, please submit any changes
> to the list by Friday 17 August 2012, 17:00 UTC.****
>
> ** **
>
> The following is a list of changes requested by the WG:****
>
> 1.       Update dissent position anchor and Appendix C****
>
> 2.       Update to note #5 of definition of Competition****
>
> 3.       Added link to attendance log****
>
> 4.       Confirmed function of hyper-links****
>
> 5.       Search for use of “the” before SO/AC****
>
> 6.       Search for proper use of ICANN Board****
>
> 7.       Highlights of Grey Sections of Metrics tables (bold)’****
>
> 8.       Page break of Grey Sections of Metrics****
>
> 9.       Added Full-Stop to Metrics Descriptions****
>
> 10.   Add end-notes to Competition Metrics Descriptions****
>
> ** **
>
> Thank you.  B****
>
> ** **
>
> Berry Cobb****
>
> Internet Corporation for Assigned Names & Numbers (ICANN)****
>
> 720.839.5735****
>
> mail@xxxxxxxxxxxxx****
>
> @berrycobb****
>
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