RE: [gnso-consumercci-dt] Latest Version of Advice Letter & Supplement

["Michael R. Graham" <mgraham@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Everything looks good.  In the first line of the GNSO cover, after the question 
“Why are consumer metrics important?”  I would insert a “the” before “extent to 
which the gTLD . . . “

Otherwise, excellent and good work!

Michael R.


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From: owner-gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx 
[mailto:owner-gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Steve DelBianco
Sent: Thursday, August 16, 2012 1:36 PM
To: Berry Cobb; gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx
Subject: Re: [gnso-consumercci-dt] Latest Version of Advice Letter & Supplement

Thanks, Berry.

In the attached markup of the Advice Letter:
On page 4 we should note Evan's reply comment.  I did it this way:
 The dissenting position of two WG members are included in Appendix C, along 
with a response to that dissent from another WG member.

On page 8 I fixed one grammar error "Scope … is "

I repeated the table heading row on several pages

The link to WG attendance Log requires the reader to have Confluence login 
credentials.   Could you save the spreadsheet as a PDF and place it somewhere 
that does not require the reader to login?

In the attached Next Steps note to GNSO:
I revised footnote 1 on the timeline to read:
ICANN Board instructs ICANN to start collecting available baseline metrics of 
existing gTLDs and new gTLDs once delegated, until final metrics framework 
requirement is completed by the Review Team

1.

2.      I revised footnote 6 to read:

3.      3 Year delegation mark for target comparison, as requested in the 
Dec-2010 ICANN Board resolution.

From: Berry Cobb <mail@xxxxxxxxxxxxx<mailto:mail@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>>
Date: Tuesday, August 14, 2012 8:06 PM
To: "gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx<mailto:gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx>" 
<gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx<mailto:gnso-consumercci-dt@xxxxxxxxx>>
Subject: [gnso-consumercci-dt] Latest Version of Advice Letter & Supplement

Team,

Here are the latest drafts of the Advice Letter and supplement Action Plan for 
the GNSO Council.  As mentioned on the call, please submit any changes to the 
list by Friday 17 August 2012, 17:00 UTC.

The following is a list of changes requested by the WG:

4.      Update dissent position anchor and Appendix C

5.      Update to note #5 of definition of Competition

6.      Added link to attendance log

7.      Confirmed function of hyper-links

8.      Search for use of “the” before SO/AC

9.      Search for proper use of ICANN Board

10.   Highlights of Grey Sections of Metrics tables (bold)’

11.   Page break of Grey Sections of Metrics

12.   Added Full-Stop to Metrics Descriptions

13.   Add end-notes to Competition Metrics Descriptions

Thank you.  B

Berry Cobb
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