Re: [gnso-dow123] FOR REVIEW: Draft Preliminary Task Force Report on the Purpose of Whois]

["Milton Mueller" <Mueller@xxxxxxx>]

Jordyn
I do have some feedback. I'd oppose all the changes proposed by Marilyn. I am 
not trying to be contentious, I am simply being realistic about what adds value 
and what our time constraints are.

Almost all of the changes proposed by Marilyn are nonessential, editorial 
matters. The report works fine as it is. It  might be nice to fine tune 
language and add things here and there but we are way beyond that point, in 
terms of our time commitments. The added value of tweaking language simply 
doesn't merit the additional work. 

A few of the changes proposed by Marilyn alter meaning in a way that is 
objectionable to us, and I suspect to other constituencies as well. This is the 
danger we get into when modifying the report. 

I strongly suggest that we accept Maria's report text (with the missing 
constituency statement added) and leave it at that. 

>>> Jordyn Buchanan <jordyn@xxxxxxxxxxxxx> 1/6/2006 12:11 PM >>>
Hi Marilyn:

Thanks for this feedback.  The summary of the formulations and the reasons
for their support is based on the comments provided in Vancouver.  The only
real change is that instead of summarizing the Core Values cited in support
of Formulation 1, as I did in Vancouver, the entire text of each Core Value
is listed.  Since specific Core Values were referenced, I thought this would
be the most helpful in allowing a reader not familiar with the ICANN bylaws
to assess the relationship between the Formulation and the Core Values.

I agree we should try to capture the comments from Vancouver.  I'll request
that Maria reviews the transcript and try to incorporate a brief summary of
any comments.

If anyone has any other feedback, now is the time to provide it.  I'd like
to wrap up any changes and get the report ready for posting by a week from
today.

Jordyn

On 1/2/06 7:02 PM, "Marilyn Cade" <marilynscade@xxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:

> Dear Maria.
> 
> Thanks for this work so close to Christmas! I have provided some comments
> that address some areas. First, there should be consistency on  in the
> treatment of Task Force throughout the document. I started changing to Task
> Force from "task force", but decided to leave that to you when you do a
> global edit. :-) 
> 
> I have also provided some substantive remarks. I provided edits to the
> section that discusses the views of the three constituencies that support
> formulation two. I know that the BC believes that the definition, which I
> provided edits to, is fully consistent with the core values and mission of
> ICANN. I didn't add in specific core values, but it might be useful to do
> that, if you are going to include those for the other formulation. On the
> other hand, since that may confuse the reader, perhaps it is better to
> simply omit specific core values and just rely on a reference to the views
> of the constituencies that they believe that the definitions are consistent.
> 
> 
> I note that there is no mention of the issues of consumer protection, which
> have come up in the discussions.
> 
> The report in fact, does seem to overlook some of the discussions and topics
> that have been undertaken by the TF. I added in a few of those.
> 
> The report is read by those not close to the work of the TF/Council as the
> explanation of what "we" have been doing, and I hope it can be expanded a
> bit to be more informative.
> 
> I have always found that the reports need to be sufficient to "inform", so
> that we are not merely appearing to take a "vote" among the community. That
> approach won't inform policy development.
> 
> I have another question for you -- there were some comments during the
> public forum itself, which I am not sure how we are capturing?
> 
> And, finally, we need to have a discussion within the Council itself on how
> we are going to provide a mechanism for discussion with the GAC on these
> issues, and others related to policy.
> 
> I suggest that the WHOIS TF chair send a request to Council asking for
> guidance on how to undertake that consultation. At Council level, we will
> need to set some guidelines for the Council's interactions with GAC on
> several policy issues, this among them.
> 
> Of course, the GAC has been aware of the WHOIS TF work already, so that
> means we are "ahead of the game", so to speak.
> 
> Thanks again for all your work on this. I look forward to seeing comments
> from other TF members.
> 
> Now, finally, Happy New Year! I think this is the first time I am writing to
> many of you, so even if a day late, still the wish is quite sincere!
> 
> Marilyn 
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> 
> Dear all,
> 
> Following the input of the task force chair, Jordyn Buchanan, I am
> circulating for your review the draft Preliminary Task Force Report on
> the Purpose of Whois.
> 
> Once it has been reviewed/revised by the task force, the report will be
> posted for public comments.  Given the holidays, may I suggest that you
> provide your comments on the report by the 12th of January, 2006?
> 
> All the best, Maria
>