RE: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 03 Oct
Team, I included some further red-line edits in the attached, building from the changes Chuck suggests below, which I support. claudio From: owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Gomes, Chuck Sent: Friday, October 08, 2010 8:44 PM To: Olga Cavalli; OSC-CSG Work Team Subject: RE: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 03 Oct I made the following edits in the attached file and noted items that I couldn't figure out how to fix: 2.1 Recommendations for a Global Outreach Strategy * I inserted "to" that was inadvertently deleted in the first sentence of the last paragraph that starts on page 3 and in the same sentence changed "large companies" to "companies". 2.1.1 Purpose, Mission, Principles, and Initiate Objective of the Outreach Task Force * I changed "Intitiate" to "Initial" in the above title. * The last paragraph starting on page 4 is very confusing: "The OSC CSG Work Team recommends that the mission of the OTF should include coordinating outreach with relevant ICANN organizations and could incorporate recommendations from the OSC CSG Work Team's report Recommended Common Operating Principles and Participation Guidelines for GNSO Stakeholder Groups and Constituencies; and Recommendations on a GNSO Database of Community Members<http://gnso.icann.org/drafts/draft-csg-recommendations-task-27may10-en.pdf> when establishing other specifics regarding the structure of the OTF, voting thresholds, publicity, events, and other activities." Is the semi-colon a typo; should it be deleted? I think this whole paragraph needs fixing. * I made what I think are minor edits to item 1 near the top of page 5: "Outreach to potential participants in the Commercial Stakeholder Group is different from outreach to potential participants in the Non-Commercial Stakeholder Group" 2.1.2 Membership of the Outreach Task Force * I deleted the following in the first paragraph: "Staff support could be minimal." I don't think we know if this will be true or not. * Also in the first paragraph I deleted the size of the MAG ("50") because I don't think we want to imply that the OTF should be that big. * In the last paragraph I made the change shown here: "The Charter should also set goals for the completion of the membership selection process, establishment of a meeting schedule, and participation guidelines." 2.1.3 Identifying Potential Participants and Target Populations * I changed the 3rd paragraph to the following: "The telecommunications youth forums at the International Telecommunications Union (ITU) are an example of successful outreach programs that could be used to inform and support the OTF's efforts. See: http://www.itu.int/ITU-D/youth/itu__telecom_youth_forums.html."; Chuck From: owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Olga Cavalli Sent: Thursday, October 07, 2010 12:35 PM To: OSC-CSG Work Team Subject: Fwd: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 03 Oct Dear working team members, please remember to review the attached document and make comments or suggested changes to this version that was edited by me and Julie. If we hear no comments we may submit it to the osc by next Monday. Comments are welcome, best regards and thanks. Olga ---------- Forwarded message ---------- From: Julie Hedlund <julie.hedlund@xxxxxxxxx<mailto:julie.hedlund@xxxxxxxxx>> Date: 2010/10/4 Subject: [gnso-osc-csg] FOR REVIEW: Revised Global Outreach Recommendations 03 Oct To: gnso-osc-csg <gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx<mailto:gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx>> Dear Olga and Work Team members, Attached is the revised Global Outreach Recommendations document based on our discussion at the Work Team meeting last Friday in response to comments received by the OSC and responses from Work Team members. These include edits from Olga and some additions that I made based on our discussion. Please review this document and provide your suggested changes as tracked changes in the document or as comments to this list. Thank you for your assistance. Best regards, Julie Attachment:
OSC Constituency Stakeholder Group Global Outreach Program Recommendations Rev 03 Oct 2010 with CD edits.doc
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