RE: [gnso-osc] Draft Invitation-Announcement To Join Work Teams

["Gomes, Chuck" <cgomes@xxxxxxxxxxxx>]

It seems to me that Wolf's reording of the message contact with the
invitation and email address for volunteering right up front may solve
the concern about wordiness.  Do you agree Philip?  Readers will see a
brief invitation and instructions in the first lines of the message and
then can read further for more detail if they want to, including
skipping to a particular work team that looks interesting to them.
 
What do others think?
 
Chuck


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        From: owner-gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx]
On Behalf Of Philip Sheppard
        Sent: Wednesday, December 17, 2008 3:36 AM
        To: gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx
        Subject: RE: [gnso-osc] Draft Invitation-Announcement To Join
Work Teams
        
        
        I am sorry to say i find the announcement wordy and overly long.
        If we are looking to enthuse new people - we need something
shorter and clearer.
         
        Suggest Rob does a ruthless edit.  We don't need to micro manage
such announcement.
         
         
        Philip