AW: [gnso-ppsc-pdp] RE: Updated version of proposed Final Report

[<KnobenW@xxxxxxxxxx>]

Just some small edits and questions: 
1. be consistent in calling it "proposed Final Report". There are still
some "draft" in Jeff's revised text.
2. Is it practical to the potential reader to look for the "Initial
Report" (see note on p. 3, para before Stage 1) for further context?
Isn't there a more useful method like attaching the contexts?
3. p. 6 line 7: "may" or " should" or something eles. This sentence is
talking about "reality is...". To ral facts May/should doesn't fit
either.
4. Rec 7: "a conclusion that no recommendation is necessary"? That
sounds a bit artificial. Why undertake the whole PDP in advance and then
coming to such a conclusion?
5. Rec. 10: I don't think the word "properly" (in "properly supported
motion") is necessary
6. Rec. 19, last sentence: Is it clear enough that the first 2adopted"
refers to the charter itself whereby the 2nd is referring to the
mofications only?
 
Since I can't participate in the meeting today I leave it for
consideration by the team and shall accept any outcome.
 


Best regards 
Wolf-Ulrich 

 


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        Von: owner-gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx
[mailto:owner-gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx] Im Auftrag von Neuman, Jeff
        Gesendet: Donnerstag, 17. Februar 2011 04:00
        An: Neuman, Jeff; Marika Konings; Gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx
        Betreff: [gnso-ppsc-pdp] RE: Updated version of proposed Final
Report
        
        

        All,

         

        Please find my proposed revisions, comments and suggestions to
Section 2 of the Report.  As with the changes to the Executive Summary,
these are being proposed in my personal capacity and NOT as the Chair of
the PDP-WT or a Registry representative.  

         

         

         

        Jeffrey J. Neuman 
        Neustar, Inc. / Vice President, Law & Policy
        
        

        
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        From: owner-gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx
[mailto:owner-gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Neuman, Jeff
        Sent: Wednesday, February 16, 2011 8:35 PM
        To: Marika Konings; Gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx
        Subject: [gnso-ppsc-pdp] RE: Updated version of proposed Final
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        All,

         

        Sorry for doing this piece-meal, but I did some editing of the
Executive Summary and am providing it to everyone at the same time.  I
do not believe I changed any of the substance, but tried to provide a
little more context.

         

        As this will be the first thing that is read (and may be the
only one sad to say), I wanted to make sure that certain aspects stood
out.  

        
        No pride of authorship here, so if you don't like or agree with
the revisions, just let me know.

        
        Thanks.

         

        Jeffrey J. Neuman 
        Neustar, Inc. / Vice President, Law & Policy

        
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        From: owner-gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx
[mailto:owner-gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Marika Konings
        Sent: Wednesday, February 16, 2011 11:52 AM
        To: Gnso-ppsc-pdp@xxxxxxxxx
        Subject: [gnso-ppsc-pdp] Updated version of proposed Final
Report

         

        Dear All,

         

        Please find attached an updated version of the proposed PDP-WT
Final Report which includes the changes / edits discussed during
Monday's meeting as well as the high-level overview graphic. 

         

        As a reminder, any substantial issues on the proposed Final
Report will need to be submitted before Thursday's meeting of the PDP WT
(14.30 UTC). Any non-substantial issues (typos, etc.) should be
submitted at the latest by close of business on Friday 18 February.

         

        Best regards,

         

        Marika