RE: [gnso-ppsc-wg] Final Version - GNSO Working Group Guidelines

["Caroline Greer" <cgreer@xxxxxxxxx>]

Thanks Marika.
 
I am surprised that of my six comments, comments 3,4 and perhaps even 6
are considered as 'substantial'. To me, they are more common sense edits
and/or a reflection of what actually happens in WG situations. 
 
I have included those 3 comments again below. Are we really not able to
include them? I'd hate to be bothering the PPSC with such minor issues.
 
Many thanks,
 
Caroline.
 
3. The last sentence of the second paragraph of Section 4.1 says, "As
described above, meetings are normally recorded and transcribed."
Perhaps we should change this to "As described above, meetings are
normally recorded or transcribed" as both rarely happen from what I
understand.

4. The last sentence of the first paragraph on page 20 says, "If funding
is required to organize such a meeting (e.g. travel expenses), a request
should be made to the Chartering Organization for approval."  It might
be good to add "with as much advance notice as possible".


6. Finally, in Annex I, Chairs Checklist, we might want to add a check
for Disclosures of Interest in each meeting when new issues are being
discussed.
 
 
 
From: owner-gnso-ppsc-wg@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-ppsc-wg@xxxxxxxxx]
On Behalf Of Marika Konings
Sent: 31 May 2010 10:30
To: Cheryl Langdon-Orr; J. Scott Evans; gnso-ppsc-wg@xxxxxxxxx
Subject: [gnso-ppsc-wg] Final Version - GNSO Working Group Guidelines
 
Dear All,

Please find attached the final version of the Working Group Guidelines,
incorporating / addressing the comments and edits provided by Avri, J.
Scott and Cheryl. In relation to Caroline's comments, apart from comment
1, I did not include her other suggestions as these seemed to be more
substantial than just edits and therefore requiring further discussion
by the WT, noting that there will be an opportunity to address these in
the PPSC discussions. I hope this is acceptable.

If there are any other edits /typos that need fixing, please let me know
as soon as possible, but no later than 18.00 UTC today (Monday 31 May).
Following that, I will submit the document for posting.

Thanks!

Marika

On 31/05/10 10:55, "Cheryl Langdon-Orr" <langdonorr@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
Only thing I noted in the version sent was an odd bit odf what looked
like 'comment' still in line in the Page 1 Sec 1.1 Background, paragraph
2 line 4 from :...and; secondly, what guidance should be provided to a
WG on elements such as structuring, norming is this a word?  perhaps
'setting norms' would be less neologistic, tasking, reporting, and
delivering the outcome(s) as chartered (the working group process)."
that needs fixing...


Cheryl Langdon-Orr
(CLO)



On 31 May 2010 10:53, J. Scott Evans <jscottevans@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
Sent attachment in second email.  Sorry for the confusion!

On Sun May 30th, 2010 5:32 PM PDT Cheryl Langdon-Orr wrote:

>I saw no attachment of the mark up file :?
> But I'm sure they would be agreeable...
>
>Cheryl Langdon-Orr
>(CLO)
>
>
>
>On 31 May 2010 10:18, J. Scott Evans <jscottevans@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
>
>> I like Avri's fix to the GNSO issue.  I have made just a few
editorial
>> revisions on top of Avri's comments.
>>
>> j. scott evans - senior legal director, global brand and trademarks -
>> Yahoo! Inc. - 408.349.1385 - jscottevans@xxxxxxxxx
>>
>>
>>
>>  ------------------------------
>> *From:* Avri Doria <avri@xxxxxxx>
>> *To:* Marika Konings <marika.konings@xxxxxxxxx>
>> *Cc:* J. Scott Scott Evans <jscottevans@xxxxxxxxx>
>> *Sent:* Wed, May 26, 2010 1:28:00 PM
>> *Subject:* edit pass
>>
>> hi,
>>
>> it was such an enthralling read, i went through to the end - and this
after
>> asking for an extension.
>>
>> i did a lot of markup and tried to propose some solution to the
GNSO-CO
>> issue.  might have gone too far, but do not think i did anything
>> substantial.
>>
>> i also pointed out some areas that might need a patch or two.
>>
>> i am fine with shipping it once these or equivalent fixes are made.
>>
>> thanks
>>
>> a.
>>
>>