[gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft
hi all, i'm attaching a new draft for you to review. it would be absolutely terrific if we could beat this draft up on the list and arrive at consensus on our next (and hopefully final) call next Thursday. i'm shipping it without the redlining because the redline history is getting pretty busy. but it's all there if you'd like to review the changes in detail. here's what's changing; - i drove that last draft version of the "transition to authoritative" language in - i added a footnote to clarify what we mean by "domains they sponsor" - i've wandered through the draft and tried to get the capitalization right on the words registrar and registry - i've summarily deleted a couple of Jeff's suggestions -- Jeff, there wasn't much appetite for them on the last call, so this is your chance to advocate/persuade if you feel really strongly (although i'll note that this is really your second chance since you had the opportunity to post to the list last week as well) - i've restructured a few sentences to swing them into the active voice and made a few other (hopefully) cosmetic changes to the language. let's try to really kick this draft hard so we can polish this off on the next call -- otherwise Marika tells me we'll miss the deadline for the Toronto agenda and i'll have to work off my schedule failure as the lowest-ranked roadie in her rock band. ;-) thanks, mikey Attachment:
Thick Whois Draft Charter - Updated 28 September 2012 - Mikey.doc - - - - - - - - - phone 651-647-6109 fax 866-280-2356 web http://www.haven2.com handle OConnorStP (ID for public places like Twitter, Facebook, Google, etc.)
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