[gtld-council] Recommendation 20 - New Wording Proposal

["Gomes, Chuck" <cgomes@xxxxxxxxxxxx>]

As promised, I reviewed what I hope were all of the recent comments
regarding Recommendation 20 and Implementation Guideline P and came up
with the attached version.  Please note the following:

*       I used Philip's latest wording (after the change made from Jon's
message) as the basis for the first four paragraphs and used the Word
tracking function to highlight changes I made.
*       I used Avri's suggested definitions as the basis for the last
three paragraphs and used the Word tracking function to highlight the
changes I made.
*       In both cases above I attempted to incorporate suggestions made
by Becky, Mawaki and Jon as well as some thoughts of my own.
*       I did not try to separate Recommendation 20 from Implementation
Guideline P so that it would be easy for everyone to see a more holistic
picture; I am assuming that it will be easy to separate these once we
agree on language.
*       I added the following sentence to the definition of 'formal
existence': "The following ICANN organizations would qualify as having
formal existence: GAC, ALAC, GNSO, ccNSO and ASO."  I am not sure that
this would create an operational role for these organizations; if it
does, we may not want to do this.  But I was trying to reconcile what
the RN-WG recommended with what we are trying to accomplish for this
issue.

I am sure that others will be able to greatly improve on the wording and
I welcome that.  The first goal should be to determine whether the
overall approach is right. If we can agree on that, then it will be
easier to fix the wording.
 
Thanks for all of the teamwork on this.  Like Avri said in a recent
message, if it seems useful to have a call tomorrow, that is an option;
but maybe we can work this via email.
 
Chuck Gomes
 
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