RE: [soac-newgtldapsup-wg] updated Milestone AND Addenda - based on JAS WG Nov 2 conference call

[Karla Valente <karla.valente@xxxxxxxxx>]

Dear Avri, all:

Thank you very much for your feedback. I made the suggested changes, but please 
see below my comments. 

Attached is the updated document incorporating Avri's comments below.



Thanks,

Karla Valente
+1 310 936 4639  

-----Original Message-----
From: Avri Doria [mailto:avri@xxxxxxx] 
Sent: Wednesday, November 03, 2010 9:16 AM
To: Karla Valente
Cc: soac-newgtldapsup-wg@xxxxxxxxx
Subject: Re: [soac-newgtldapsup-wg] updated Milestone AND Addenda - based on 
JAS WG Nov 2 conference call

Hi,

Thanks for getting the updated final document out so quickly.

I made a pass through it before proceeding to the 48 hour last call.  I think 
that the following need to be corrected before I initiate that call.  Unless 
others find problems in 21-1 or in my recommended changes, I would like to 
start the last call once Karla has had a chance to make the following changes.

The corrections and recommended changes that I noticed:

228:   Developing Nations/Countries; Emerging Markets/Nations/Countries

I think we agreed that through the document there would be only 2 terms of art 
used:
- developing countries
- Emerging markets/nations

So this heading should read:  Developing countries; Emerging markets/nations.

KARLA: DONE



and through the document those are the only terms that sould be used to refer 
to this concept.  
This affects lines: 234, 461/462, 625

KARLA: DONE



229:  These terms are often use in this Report

replace 'use' with 'used'

KARLA: DONE



230:  classification and it will accept a classification

replace 'it will accept'  with 'and recommends using'

KARLA: DONE



232:   these organizations might update its classification

replace 'its' with 'their'

KARLA: DONE



233:  acknowledges that agencies that if the future participate

replace 'if' with 'in'


KARLA: DONE



234:  'developing nations/countries'  should be 'emerging markets/nations'

KARLA: DONE - I note that this way it looks like we have established the term 
to be use in the future as emerging markets/nations.



237:   The section is not numbered.  And somehow this throws of the number 
later of section 3 at line 531.  Need to fix the numbering.

KARLA: I think I corrected this. Please check. I am not sure I understood.



461/462:  'markets/developing countries'  should be 'emerging markets/nations'

KARLA: DONE


614:  and, if case there is any reduction,

Replace 'if case' with 'in case'

KARLA: DONE



625:  'developing/emerging country'  should be 'developing country'.

KARLA: DONE



660/661:  yellow highlighting should be removed.

KARLA: DONE

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Note about the 48 hour last call: 

I recommend the following procedure.  During that time, if anyone spots a 
substantive issue, the last call timer will halt until the issue has been fixed 
and then will resume.  If there is less that 24 hours left to the last call 
timer at the point of a halt, the last timer will be set to 24 hours so that 
everyone has some daytime in which to review the last changes.

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I recommend that everyone review the addenda and send comments to the list.  We 
will put this on the agenda for the Friday meeting, but it would be good if we 
did not spedn the entire meeting on that document.

Thanks again,

a.







On 2 Nov 2010, at 17:37, Karla Valente wrote:

> Dear all,
>  
> Please find attached:
> 1.       The Milestone Report incorporating today's suggested modifications
> 2.       Updated ADDENDA
>  
> What do we need?
> 1.       Final Review and approval of Milestone Report. Once this is done, I 
> will submit to translations and post for public comment
> 2.       Discuss pages 23 to 37 of the ADDENDA- this is the Summary and 
> Analysis of the snapshot Public comments received between June 16 to August 
> 23 2010
>  
> Avri, Evan:
> I have not touched the Charter yet. If you expect me to do the amendment, 
> please let me know. I believe after we review and agree on the PC, we need to 
> get the Charter updated and plan for Cartagena sessions.
>  
> Thanks,
>  
>  
> Karla Valente
> Product/Services Director
> Internet Corporation for Assigned Names and Numbers (ICANN) 
> Direct:  + 1 310 301 3878  
> Mobile:  +1 310 936 4639 
> Skype: kdlvalente
>  
> <Draft Final Report JAS WG v 2 21.doc><ADDENDA- JAS WG NOV2.doc>

Attachment: Draft Final Report JAS WG v 2 21.doc
Description: Draft Final Report JAS WG v 2 21.doc