RE: [gnso-osc-csg] Actions/Summary: 26 March 2010 Meeting

["Gomes, Chuck" <cgomes@xxxxxxxxxxxx>]

I don't understand why there appear to be edits made in quotations from
the BGC report (e.g., Section 1.1)
 
After finalizing this document in terms of content, I suggest that a
clean MS Word version be created and that a new redline version be
created with minor, non-substantial edits be done because the wording is
very poor in lots of cases, probably because of the many edits.  I did
not comment on these kinds of edits below.
 
In II.1.c, I think "A member who has served two consecutive terms on the
Executive Committee must remain out of office for one full term prior to
serving any subsequent term as a member of the Executive Committee."
should be changed to "A member who has served four consecutive years on
the Executive Committee must remain out of office for one full term
prior to serving any subsequent term as a member of the Executive
Committee."  I think the same change applies to II.4.
 
II.3.a (formerly b) has what appears to be an incomplete sentence:
"should be open and publicly archived --with posting rights limited to
members at the election of the".
 
II.9 needs some serious editing.
 
II.11 - Not sure a handbook is worth the effort if the recommendations
are concisely and clearly written.
 
II.12 - What is the purpose of this: "We recommend that all
recommendations above, apply also to the Contracted House Stakeholder
Groups." ?  I thought the plan was to refer to Constituencies and SGs in
all cases.
 
Who is the "we" in Part IV?  What is the purpose of this section?  Why
are the subsections numbered 3.x?
 
This document is way too long.
 
Using a wiki is terribly ineffecience for such a long document.
 
Chuck
 
 


________________________________

        From: owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx
[mailto:owner-gnso-osc-csg@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Julie Hedlund
        Sent: Friday, March 26, 2010 3:48 PM
        To: gnso-osc-csg
        Subject: [gnso-osc-csg] Actions/Summary: 26 March 2010 Meeting
        
        
        Dear Work Team members,
        
        Here are the actions/summary from today's meeting and posted on
the wiki at:
https://st.icann.org/icann-osc/index.cgi?constituency_operations_team..
Please let me know if you have any changes or questions.  Our next
meeting will be held Friday, 09 April at 1300 UTC/0600 PST/0900 EST for
one hour.   Thank you very much.
        
        Best regards,
        
        Julie
        
        Action Items:
        1. Task 1, Subtask 2: (See the wiki at:
https://st.icann.org/icann-osc/index.cgi?constituency_and_stake_holder_g
roup_operations_work_team_task_1_subtask_2. )
        A) CHANGES THROUGH SECTION 8:
        

        *       Work Team members should review all changes through
Section 8. Policy and provide comments to the list not later than
Friday, 01 April. It will be assumed that all changes are agreed to if
no comments are received. 
        *       Rafik Dammak agreed to ask Mary Wong if she had
suggestions for alternative language for Section 8. Policy, paragraph b.
"Committee meetings should be open for attendance by all {GROUP} members
-- and at the election of the Constituency -- to the public." 
        *       Krista Papac agreed to review Claudio DiGangi's
suggested language (added to the wiki) to Section 4. Voting as it also
could be applied to Section 1. Executive Committees to maintain
consistency.
                

        B) REMAINING SECTIONS: Work Team members should review the
remaining sections of Task 1, Subtask 2 and send comments to the list: 
        

        *       9. GNSO WG; 
        *       10. Reference to Code of Practice at Annex B (and Annex
B text); 
        *       11. Reference to Handbook on Common Rules and
Principles;   
        *       12. Reference to recommendations applying to Contracted
House Stakeholder Groups; and 
        *       Part IV: Analysis
                

        
        2. Task 1, Subtask 3: Julie will load the latest version from
Krista on the wiki. Work Team members are requested to review the
document in preparation for the meeting on Friday, 09 April.
        
        3. Task 2: Outreach: Debbie Hughes will provide some ideas to
begin the discussion on the Sub Team. The Sub Team members are: Debbie
(leader), Olga Cavalli, Rafik Dammak, Claudio DiGangi, Chuck Gomes, and
Michael Young.
        
        Summary:
        

        *       Olga noted that Philip Sheppard, the new Chair of the
Operations Steering Committee, has requested that the Work Team complete
its work by 01 June in preparation for the ICANN meeting in Brussels.
Olga explained to Philip that the Work Team might not be able to
complete Task 2, but would complete the remaining subtasks of Task 1.
She recommended that the Work Team should finish Task 1, Subtask 2 by
the next meeting and begin a review of Task 1, Subtask 3, and asked
Krista to send the latest version for Julie to load on the wiki. 
        *       The Work Team discussed additional changes to Section 1.
Elections and Section 4. Voting. Claudio provided revised language to
the list for consideration. Krista agreed to review Section 1. Elections
in view of Claudio's revised language. 
        *       The Work Team agreed to retain the previous changes in
Section 5. Voting. Rafik agreed to ask Mary Wong if she had suggestions
for alternative language for Section 8. Policy, paragraph b. "Committee
meetings should be open for attendance by all Constituency {GROUP}
members -- and at the election of the Constituency -- to the public." 
        *       On Task 2, Olga asked for volunteers for a Task Sub
Team. Debbie Hughes agreed to be the leader of the Sub Team and the
other volunteers were: Olga Cavalli, Rafik Dammak, Claudio DiGangi,
Chuck Gomes, and Michael Young. 
        *