Nice improvements Steve.
Chuck
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*From:* Metalitz, Steven [mailto:met@xxxxxxx]
*Sent:* Wednesday, December 10, 2008 2:27 PM
*To:* Gomes, Chuck; Robert Hoggarth; gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx
*Subject:* RE: [gnso-osc] New Clean and Redline Draft OSC Charters
Documents
My only suggested change is in footnote 1, which, though it was
added for clarity, I found confusing because "stakeholder" was
used at both ends of the chain.
Steve Metalitz
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*From:* owner-gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx]
*On Behalf Of *Gomes, Chuck
*Sent:* Wednesday, December 10, 2008 7:49 AM
*To:* Robert Hoggarth; gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx
*Subject:* RE: [gnso-osc] New Clean and Redline Draft OSC Charters
Documents
*Importance:* High
Thank you very much Rob. Attached is a copy of the clean version
with some additional highlighted edits I suggest. I believe that
the edits are nonmaterial but if anyone thinks otherwise and/or
disagrees with them, please speak up.
For everyone except for Philip, who already approved Rob's
version, please use the attached version for approval purposes.
Philip, if you disagree with any of the edits, please let us know.
Remember that our goal is to approve this ASAP on the list so it
would be very much appreciated if all primary OSC reps would
respond by tomorrow if possible.
Thanks, Chuck
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*From:* owner-gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx
[mailto:owner-gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx] *On Behalf Of *Robert Hoggarth
*Sent:* Tuesday, December 09, 2008 4:19 PM
*To:* gnso-osc@xxxxxxxxx
*Subject:* [gnso-osc] New Clean and Redline Draft OSC Charters
Documents
Dear OSC Members;
Pursuant to the discussions on today's call and for your
review and further discussion, attached please find the latest
red-line and clean versions of the Draft OSC Charter. As
instructed, in the "Redline" version I retained the old
red-line edits (included blue color text added by Robin G.)
and made additional changes to reflect the discussions on the
call. Chuck asked me to take a shot at language in the bullet
#2 at the beginning of the document. I added three words and
a footnote to that section. Otherwise most of the other new
changes are non-substantive formatting modifications that
Chuck noted on the call. I recommend that anyone with
additional edits add them to the clean version and circulated
as appropriate.
In reviewing the two documents before appending to this
message, it appears that the only remaining substantive
discussion regarding the Charter may be the Goals and
Milestones section on the last page of the document which
currently reads "To be determined by the OSC and approved by
the Council."
Best regards,
Rob Hoggarth
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