RE: [gnso-raa-b] Sections 1-4

["Hammock, Statton" <shammock@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Steve, 

I just had couple of minor edits for Sections 1 -4. 

At the end of 1.1 there is this bracketed sentence which reads:

[In addition, during their meeting of 25 May 2010, the At-Large Advisory
Committee (ALAC) by consensus endorsed the draft Initial Report on
Proposals for Improvements to the Registrar Accreditation Agreement. ]

 I recommend deleting this sentence (if it was intended to remain) as
the placement here seems awkward and I don't know why we would
necessarily highlight this fact. 

 

Also, a couple of "nits": I think we use "At-Large Community" as a
capitalized term so we should check consistency. There are a few places
where it appears as "At-Large community" (like in Section 4.1). Also in
Section 4.1, last paragraph, there is a sentence that reads "A working
group could conduct be chartered....."  I think we meant to delete the
word "conduct" in this sentence. 

 

Let me know if anyone has any questions. 

 

Thanks.

 

Statton 

 

 Statton Hammock 
 Sr. Director, Law, Policy & Business Affairs 

 

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From: owner-gnso-raa-b@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-raa-b@xxxxxxxxx] On
Behalf Of Metalitz, Steven
Sent: Tuesday, May 18, 2010 11:40 AM
To: gnso-raa-b@xxxxxxxxx
Subject: [gnso-raa-b] Revised draft of Section V 

 

SubTeam B participants, 

Following up on yesterday's call, attached please find a proposed
revision of section V of the Initial Draft Report.  It lays out the two
options for "next steps," and includes a draft of a brief supporting
statement for the option that commands Strong Support within the
SubTeam.  I understand that one of the registrar representatives
(perhaps Statton?) will draft a statement of similar length for the
alternative approach.  Of course, your comments and edits on anything in
this document are welcomed.  Please circulated these as soon as
possible, and in any case by Thursday of this week, so that we can stay
on track for circulation of a "final" draft by staff no later than next
Monday.  Thanks.  

Steve Metalitz 

<<Section V draft (2697426).DOC>>