RE: [gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft
Hi all, Attached are some suggested edits to the Charter. I accepted all the changes in Mikey's latest version and then made my proposed edits in a new/clean document. Happy to discuss further on today's call. Thanks, Keith Keith Drazek Director of Policy kdrazek@xxxxxxxxxxxx m: +1-571-377-9182 21345 Ridgetop Circle Dulles, VA 20166 VerisignInc.com -----Original Message----- From: owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Mike O'Connor Sent: Wednesday, October 03, 2012 11:48 AM To: Gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx DT Subject: Re: [gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft hi Ray, thanks for breaking the ice. :-) i agree with your idea -- good catch. does this cause any heartburn for others? mikey On Oct 3, 2012, at 9:35 AM, Ray Fassett <ray@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Mikey, while it seems all quiet on the western front, I thought I > would go ahead and break the ice with this thought for you. Under > Mission and Scope, it says the following: > > "The PDP Working Group is tasked to provide the GNSO Council with a > policy recommendation regarding the use of 'thick' Whois by all gTLD > Registries, both existing and future." > > Under Objective and Goals it says: > > "To develop, at a minimum, an Initial Report and a Final Report > addressing whether there should be a requirement for 'thick' Whois for > all gTLD Registries to be delivered to the GNSO Council, following the > processes described in Annex A of the ICANN Bylaws and the GNSO PDP Manual." > > Should the Objective and Goals language be altered to be optically > consistent with the Mission and Scope? For example: > > To develop, at a minimum, an Initial Report and a Final Report > regarding the use of 'thick' Whois by all gTLD Registries, both > existing and future to be delivered to the GNSO Council, following the > processes described in Annex A of the ICANN Bylaws and the GNSO PDP Manual. > > Personally, I do not see much distinction between "Mission & Purpose" > and "Objective & Goals". If others feel same, my thinking is that the > two should read reasonably consistent (one way or another) for less > opportunity to potentially varied differences of interpretation later. > > Ray > > > -----Original Message----- > From: owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx > [mailto:owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Mike O'Connor > Sent: Friday, September 28, 2012 11:06 AM > To: Gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx DT > Subject: [gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft > > hi all, > > i'm attaching a new draft for you to review. it would be absolutely > terrific if we could beat this draft up on the list and arrive at > consensus on our next (and hopefully final) call next Thursday. > > i'm shipping it without the redlining because the redline history is > getting pretty busy. but it's all there if you'd like to review the > changes in detail. > > here's what's changing; > > - i drove that last draft version of the "transition to authoritative" > language in > > - i added a footnote to clarify what we mean by "domains they sponsor" > > - i've wandered through the draft and tried to get the capitalization > right on the words registrar and registry > > - i've summarily deleted a couple of Jeff's suggestions -- Jeff, there > wasn't much appetite for them on the last call, so this is your chance > to advocate/persuade if you feel really strongly (although i'll note > that this is really your second chance since you had the opportunity > to post to the list last week as well) > > - i've restructured a few sentences to swing them into the active > voice and made a few other (hopefully) cosmetic changes to the language. > > let's try to really kick this draft hard so we can polish this off on > the next call -- otherwise Marika tells me we'll miss the deadline for > the Toronto agenda and i'll have to work off my schedule failure as > the lowest-ranked roadie in her rock band. ;-) > > thanks, > > mikey > > - - - - - - - - - phone 651-647-6109 fax 866-280-2356 web http://www.haven2.com handle OConnorStP (ID for public places like Twitter, Facebook, Google, etc.) Attachment:
Draft Thick Whois Charter - KDrazek.docx
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