RE: [gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft
Based on Keith's document, I have proposed some clarification of the a few of the bulleted items for readability. I had no substantive changes to the points that he has included. I would suggest moving the section on the consideration of other items directly under the primary points of consideration and not at the end. This is then followed by other outside activities and groups that should be considered/consulted. Regards, Carolyn Hoover -----Original Message----- From: owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Drazek, Keith Sent: Thursday, October 04, 2012 10:10 AM To: Gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx DT Subject: RE: [gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft Hi all, Attached are some suggested edits to the Charter. I accepted all the changes in Mikey's latest version and then made my proposed edits in a new/clean document. Happy to discuss further on today's call. Thanks, Keith Keith Drazek Director of Policy kdrazek@xxxxxxxxxxxx m: +1-571-377-9182 21345 Ridgetop Circle Dulles, VA 20166 VerisignInc.com -----Original Message----- From: owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx [mailto:owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Mike O'Connor Sent: Wednesday, October 03, 2012 11:48 AM To: Gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx DT Subject: Re: [gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft hi Ray, thanks for breaking the ice. :-) i agree with your idea -- good catch. does this cause any heartburn for others? mikey On Oct 3, 2012, at 9:35 AM, Ray Fassett <ray@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Mikey, while it seems all quiet on the western front, I thought I > would go ahead and break the ice with this thought for you. Under > Mission and Scope, it says the following: > > "The PDP Working Group is tasked to provide the GNSO Council with a > policy recommendation regarding the use of 'thick' Whois by all gTLD > Registries, both existing and future." > > Under Objective and Goals it says: > > "To develop, at a minimum, an Initial Report and a Final Report > addressing whether there should be a requirement for 'thick' Whois for > all gTLD Registries to be delivered to the GNSO Council, following the > processes described in Annex A of the ICANN Bylaws and the GNSO PDP Manual." > > Should the Objective and Goals language be altered to be optically > consistent with the Mission and Scope? For example: > > To develop, at a minimum, an Initial Report and a Final Report > regarding the use of 'thick' Whois by all gTLD Registries, both > existing and future to be delivered to the GNSO Council, following the > processes described in Annex A of the ICANN Bylaws and the GNSO PDP Manual. > > Personally, I do not see much distinction between "Mission & Purpose" > and "Objective & Goals". If others feel same, my thinking is that the > two should read reasonably consistent (one way or another) for less > opportunity to potentially varied differences of interpretation later. > > Ray > > > -----Original Message----- > From: owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx > [mailto:owner-gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx] On Behalf Of Mike O'Connor > Sent: Friday, September 28, 2012 11:06 AM > To: Gnso-thickwhois-dt@xxxxxxxxx DT > Subject: [gnso-thickwhois-dt] Consensus-candidate charter draft > > hi all, > > i'm attaching a new draft for you to review. it would be absolutely > terrific if we could beat this draft up on the list and arrive at > consensus on our next (and hopefully final) call next Thursday. > > i'm shipping it without the redlining because the redline history is > getting pretty busy. but it's all there if you'd like to review the > changes in detail. > > here's what's changing; > > - i drove that last draft version of the "transition to authoritative" > language in > > - i added a footnote to clarify what we mean by "domains they sponsor" > > - i've wandered through the draft and tried to get the capitalization > right on the words registrar and registry > > - i've summarily deleted a couple of Jeff's suggestions -- Jeff, there > wasn't much appetite for them on the last call, so this is your chance > to advocate/persuade if you feel really strongly (although i'll note > that this is really your second chance since you had the opportunity > to post to the list last week as well) > > - i've restructured a few sentences to swing them into the active > voice and made a few other (hopefully) cosmetic changes to the language. > > let's try to really kick this draft hard so we can polish this off on > the next call -- otherwise Marika tells me we'll miss the deadline for > the Toronto agenda and i'll have to work off my schedule failure as > the lowest-ranked roadie in her rock band. ;-) > > thanks, > > mikey > > - - - - - - - - - phone 651-647-6109 fax 866-280-2356 web http://www.haven2.com handle OConnorStP (ID for public places like Twitter, Facebook, Google, etc.) Attachment:
Draft Thick Whois Charter - KDrazek (2)-cth.docx
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